Rae Daniel has her fabulous debut with the novella When I Make You Mine. Today, I’m sharing my review of this 1-month-old short and steamy novel. Go grab your own copy today (check the end of this article for the purchase links).
*** Disclaimer: I received an ARC from the author in exchange for an honest review. However, this doesn’t affect my opinion of this book and the words in this review. ***
When I Make You Mine is a novella, which means it’s a shorter novel than the books I normally read. I really hoped the length wouldn’t compromise my ability to form a connection with Jim and Anne. Unfortunately, that’s what happened. Still, I really enjoyed reading When I Make You Mine and I’ll tell you why. First of all, that cover. A beautiful body. Yes please!
Anne is in her bedroom, being ill and lying in bed, when her on-again-off-again scumbag of a boyfriend, Tom, cheats on her with her trashy roommate, Amanda. Apparently it’s not the first time, but this time around they are caught in the act by Anne herself. The first thought while reading this was ‘how stupid and crass could you be to have sex with your girlfriend’s roommate when she is terribly sick upstairs’. Worst boyfriend ever! Don’t get me wrong, I think cheating is always senseless and heartless and I don’t condone it in any way, shape or form. But this was a whole other level of foolish. I did think Anne’s reaction was pretty priceless. You go girl! No tears were shed. She stayed as calm as she could be and said all the correct things. Even when she couldn’t even stand upright for more than five minutes without passing out due to problems with breathing. That’s my kind of girl.
Additionally, she also had the sense to call her best friend Renee to bring her to the hospital. Where she meets hot doctor Jim in the ER. And she couldn’t look away anymore. She almost begged (in her head of course) to see his ass in scrubs. Subsequently, the blazing times between Jim and Anne began. However, I think that’s when things went a little down hill for me. From that moment, Anne’s character irritated me a little bit. Her thoughts came of childish. I thought she overreacted to a lot of things. She resembled a small child, whining about nothing. And even when she was feeling as sick as she was, she still found the time to worry about appearances. About hers and Jim’s. Though, that did made me laugh. It was a bit strange that an hour after the cheating part, Anne’s heart was beating fast for every cute guy she saw. She became a flustered mess while first talking to Mark and later in contact with Jim. But maybe this said more about the level of seriousness of her relationship with Tom than it did about her personality. I loved her sense of humor, though. Anne could also be very stubborn. After getting a doctor’s order to rest and saying she understands, she went to a restaurant with Renee for drinks. That doesn’t sound very wise to me.
During the progress of the story I found more and more things of Anne I liked. She was still whining, but there were more layers to her personality. I liked Jim’s character a lot better. There was more to him and he had more layers. He also came of as less shallow than Anne. Although, his thoughts were sexually induced a lot. Boys will be boys. But if I have to be completely honest, I didn’t feel a strong connection to both of them. It didn’t matter how hard I tried, I just couldn’t.
One thing I absolutely loved about When I Make You Mine were the names of the chapters. I find it immensely boring when chapters are just called chapter one and two and so on. So seeing that Rae Daniels named her chapters was a very nice surprise. The chapter names were a surprising and great extra element of When I Make You Mine. Think about names such as The Douchebag, The House Call and The Reveal. Another thing I liked was the humor throughout the story. Even during the serious parts. Like during the catching in the act thing. I also really enjoyed the epilogue. A cute and sweet ending to Anne and Jim’s story. Besides, there were more than enough beautiful lines to highlight. I literally had to make difficult choices for the selection of quotes for this review.
Still, I couldn’t fully involve myself into the story and I had difficulty with sympathizing with the characters. I missed descriptions of Jim and Anne. I couldn’t find their personality traits and I don’t know what kind of job Anne has. Everything went extremely fast. The scenes, but also the relationship between Anne and Jim. They had insta-love. If there is one thing I don’t love in books it’s insta-love, because it’s not relatable to real life. But even though things went fast, Rae Daniel still knew how to build up the tension between Anne and Jim, making it explode when they had sex for the first time. There were other elements in the story that weren’t realistic. And there were also a couple of minor inconsistencies in the story. For example, later on in the book, you read about Renee working at the same hospital as Jim. But that’s the first time it’s mentioned and the first time they met they acted like strangers. Also Anne speaks about not seeing and talking to Jim for weeks, but she does know his work schedule. That seems a bit strange to me. As working at a hospital in the ER would mean Jim has an irregular schedule.
Overall, I thought When I Make You Mine was a cute and hot story to read in between moments. It had a lot of dirty, sexy talk and descriptive steamy, sexy scenes. I’m used to that by now, so it didn’t bother me. It just made the novel swelteringly hot. I am eminently delighted for the other three books in the Richmond Series to be released. When I Make You Mine is a charming debut for Ms. Daniel. Even though I have some criticism, I still genuinely had a good time reading it. And I really hope I’ll get the chance to read both Ben’s and Renee’s stories, because they also deserve happy ever afters. Hopefully, with each other. If you like reading novella’s and aren’t opposed to reading about sex, you should totally read When I Make You Mine.
3.5 WHEN I MAKE YOU MINE STARS (★★★)
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